Bug#863817: release-notes: Release notes for Stretch by Debian Med team

[Andreas Tille]

Package: release-notes
Severity: normal
Tags: patch

Hi,

I'd like to propose the following text from the Debian Med team for
the Stretch release notes:


<title>News from Debian Med Blend</title>

<para>Besides several new packages and updates for software targeting
life sciences and medicine the Debian Med team has again put a focus on
the quality of the provided packages. In a GSoC project and an
Outreachy project two students worked hard to add Continuous Integration
support to the packages with the highest usage statistics due to
popularity contest. The latest Debian Med sprint in Bukarest was also
targeting at testing packages.
</para><para>
To install packages maintained by the Debian Med team install the
metapackages named med-* which are at version 3.0.1 for Debian Stretch
Feel free to visit the
<ulink url="http://blends.debian.org/med/tasks">Debian Med tasks pages</ulink>
to see the full range of biological and medical software inside Debian.
</para>


Please feel free to discuss / enhance this text (which is also available in
SVN[1]).

Kind regards and thanks for working on the Debian release

Andreas.


[1] https://anonscm.debian.org/viewvc/debian-med/trunk/community/releasenotes/stretch/release-notes.patch?revision=23774&view=markup


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[Justin B Rye]

Post by Andreas Tille
I'd like to propose the following text from the Debian Med team for
<title>News from Debian Med Blend</title>
<para>Besides several new packages and updates for software targeting

There might be a better alternative to "Besides" here, but if so I'm
not sure what it is.

Post by Andreas Tille
life sciences and medicine the Debian Med team has again put a focus on

^
Maybe a comma after "medicine".

Post by Andreas Tille
the quality of the provided packages. In a GSoC project and an
Outreachy project two students worked hard to add Continuous Integration

^
Maybe a comma after "project", and just possibly make it "In one GSoC
and one Outreachy project".

Post by Andreas Tille
support to the packages with the highest usage statistics due to

s/due/according/, or just say "the highest popularity-contest usage
statistics".

Post by Andreas Tille
popularity contest. The latest Debian Med sprint in Bukarest was also
targeting at testing packages.

s/Bukarest/Bucharest/ (if we aren't using "București").

s/was also targeting/also targeted/, but we've already used this verb,
so switch to "concentrated on".

s/testing packages/package testing/ (assuming it means software QA as
opposed to packages in Debian testing, or indeed medical testing).

Post by Andreas Tille
</para><para>
To install packages maintained by the Debian Med team install the

^
Probably a comma after "team".

Post by Andreas Tille
metapackages named med-* which are at version 3.0.1 for Debian Stretch

^
Definitely needs a comma before "which" (to make it a description
rather than a definition), and definitely a full stop after "Stretch"!

Also, we're standardising on lowercase releasenames: "stretch".

Post by Andreas Tille
Feel free to visit the
<ulink url="http://blends.debian.org/med/tasks">Debian Med tasks pages</ulink>
to see the full range of biological and medical software inside Debian.
</para>

s/inside/in/, but this feels like a weak ending... slightly better
would be "available in".

So my revised version:

<title>News from Debian Med Blend</title>

<para>Besides several new packages and updates for software targeting
life sciences and medicine, the Debian Med team has again put a focus on
the quality of the provided packages. In a GSoC project and an
Outreachy project, two students worked hard to add Continuous Integration
support to the packages with the highest popularity-contest usage
statistics. The latest Debian Med sprint in Bucharest also
concentrated on package testing.
</para><para>
To install packages maintained by the Debian Med team, install the
metapackages named med-*, which are at version 3.0.1 for Debian stretch.
Feel free to visit the
<ulink url="http://blends.debian.org/med/tasks">Debian Med tasks pages</ulink>
to see the full range of biological and medical software available in Debian.
</para>

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